返回 给爷欺负一辈子！……
Small bug
2014-10-20 07:25:22 发表
I was going to bite my tongue but I just have to come out and spill the beans. Wasn“t White Shadow seriously injured three years ago? How could he have saved someone that could have taken him into the underground? Also， the author explained in a previous chapter that Papa Cold was the only one who knew where he went. Where does that fit into the scenario，then， of White Shadow saving that someone? I am not trying to nitpick here， but if the author had stayed on track， this would have been a much better developed story just between the two lovebirds.
不知道简介里面所讲的五年为什么在故事里面会被改成三年，可是我觉得按照他们的发展，五年可能都还不够用。。。可能作者不想让他们三个失去爱人太久吧。。。
呵呵呵。骑士，你还真是严格啊，话说你英文很好是不唷，俺还要去有道翻译者看，好丢脸哇俺，不过你说的没错啦，年数应该没错，可能是哪里错了，另外亲很厉害，眼睛很尖，我这部文却是有为我下一部文做铺垫哟，就是里面出现过的暗夜蔷薇这个组织，接下去的两部文都将有这个组织的粗线，其实一开始真的只是想简单写个青梅竹马的故事，谁知道越写越不对，然后就变成酱紫了，另外两只我是真的不忍心放弃，加上我本人也比较喜欢多人宠爱，所以就NP结局了，至于白絮这个人，其实他有很多缺陷来着，只是我没有着重凸出来。综合多不文的经验，我只希望越写越好，希望骑士多多提点意见，不知道邪帝是不是你喜欢的类型，抱歉这么晚才回复。么么哒~~~~
英文看懂了，╮(╯▽╰)╭，羞愧捂脸，俺知道漏洞很多啦。俺尽力了啦~只希望以后这样的事情可以尽量避免。羞涩~谢谢亲的留言~
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